My Procedural Writing Learning Story About How To Make A Light Bulb Work

We have been learning to describe a process.

When I write, I need to think about the ideas, structure & language, organization, vocabulary, sentences, spelling and punctuation I use.  

Ideas	Structure and Language	Organization	Vocabulary	Sentence Structure	Spelling	Punctuation
-Write using a range of ideas, experiences or items of information -Confidently shape my ideas for effect -Create content that is concise and relevant to the curriculum task -Support my ideas with precise detail -Uses ‘show does not tell’ when appropriate	-Deliberately choose a clear, controlled and logical text structure to suit the audience and purpose -Show creativity and innovation when creating texts for my audience -choose appropriate adjectives, verbs, nouns and adverbs.	-Write in structured, well-developed paragraphs that flow well from one to the next within the text -Use linking words and phrases to link paragraphs for effect -Use a bullet point or number to separate the different steps	-Maintain audience interest through content, humour and language choices -Use language that is suitable to the topic and purpose, and discuss these choices with others -Deliberately use written and visual language features when appropriate to enhance my writing; e.g similes, metaphors, personification, hyperbole, rhetorical questions and diagrams -Use a range of precise vocabulary to communicate meaning	-Use a variety of sentence structures, beginnings and lengths to give effect -Use complex sentences that are grammatically correct -Use some conjunctions correctly eg: FANBOYS (for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so) -Use complex sentences.	-Write all basic sound and spelling patterns and use spelling rules to write unknown words -Spell words correctly by drawing on knowledge of how words work	-Use all basic punctuation independently -Attempt more complex punctuation (eg semicolons, colons, parentheses).

Here is a piece of writing I did this term.  

I was writing to describe the process that enables a lightbulb to turn on.  Notice how I used feedback to improve my work.

Here are the items you need to make the

Light Bulb work

-Light bulb

-Battery

-Wire

-Switch

So how to make a light bulb works is with the battery, but not just any kind of battery.  You need A USB rechargeable torch, that can be of particular use if you have access to a power source or portable power bank. What made the light go on? Electricity does! Electricity as in a circuit.

A circuit is a form of electricity, that goes round and round in circles. When you press the switch to go off the circuit will cut off, because the circuit needs its power to keep going. If you press the switch the circle won’t be a circle.

Either way, sometimes the circuit will cut because your battery has been used and the battery will turn off.

Electricity flows through a thin tungsten wire in the light bulb called the filament. This resistance, the filament heats up and starts glowing, converting electrical energy to light energy.

Teacher Feedback: Go back to re-read your sentences to think about where commas need to go to separate out the parts of a sentence, or the beginning parts from the end.

Buddy feedback: you used lots of science words that I can’t even say but overall good job.

Teana> Thanks (:  Maybe you could make some paragraphs. >Teana> ok

My next step is to support my ideas with precise detail but I also need to know how to do it and find out what it means, because if I don't know what something means or is it means I will obviously not have it in any of my writing.

My Fractions Maths Video

Mindfulness learning Story

In Room 4, we’ve been learning to be mindful.

Being mindful is helpful for me because it helps
me to be calm because I think that when I’m just quiet,
I think it makes me feel calmer and not angry.
When I’m calm I can control my feelings, myself and anger so
other Red Zone feelings don’t take control of my feelings.

There are different ways to do mindfulness.  
We can do mindful moving, mindful eating or mindful breathing.  

The best way for me to do mindfulness is to stay sitting
up and not lying down.

this is because when I lie down it makes my back hurt
and it's uncomfortable.

On this page of free resources, I recommend you try
Happy Heart. I recommend Happy Heart because
when I did Happy Heart with my class I was mad but after
the mindfulness, I was just happy and I could control myself.

Thinking about Justice and Injustice

Room 4, we’ve been thinking about things that are just and unjust.

We’ve been reading a book called ‘Dawn Raids’ by Pauline Smith.

We’ve been thinking about what is just or unjust in the story.

I think it was fair when the Nana smacked the Dawn Raiders because of the
Dawn Raids woke everyone up in the house, even the old people!
Also, it was fair because if I was old and someone shouted at me to wake up,
I would’ve smacked them.

I think it was unfair when Alex tried to attack the cop but then the other guy
tries to stop Alex from attacking a cop, but then the cop turns around and
thinks that he tried to attack him so the cops put him in the patty wagon.

We’ve also been learning about the treaty of Waitangi.  
We’ve been finding out about promises that were broken.

I think it was fair when Te Rauparaha and Te Rangihaeata were just living
peacefully in their land.

I think it was unfair when George Grey bought the treaty to New Zealand
but he broke the treaty. The Treaty said that they would bring Maori good
stuff and leave them in peace and they could keep their land,
but George Grey broke the promise because he was a Double-Agent.

I was able to make some connections between these things and my life.  

In my life, it’s fair when I get to be in peace and my parents aren’t bossing
me around.

In my life, it’s unfair when I get in trouble for things I didn’t do, Like how
I always have to clean up every mess in the house like I’m the maid in my house,
Or when my parents growl me and tell me to clean my room just after I
cleaned my room.

When that unfair thing happened, I yell at my sister and tell her to clean her
messy room for once.

Swimming learning story

Swimming Learning Story

I have been learning swimming at Cannons Creek Pool.

In swimming, I’m really good at

I can kick on my back for very long but either way, I still need to check
if I’m about to hit the edge.

I’ve been learning to do backstroke and make my tummy stick up,
I also have been learning how to do a Dolphin Dive and Rocketship arms when I swim.

Something I’d still like to learn is how to do a backstroke properly.

Photos of me

    

        Me trying to kick on my back
My free time in the pool